ICS 139W Fall 2015, Emily Navarro
(assignment adapted with permission from Deva Ramanan)
Personal Statement
For this assignment, you will prepare a personal statement, similar to one you may be required to write for application to graduate school (e.g., an MBA) or fellowship. Select one of the following questions to answer with an essay of approximately three pages:
Due dates:
• October 1—Draft for peer review in class
• October 15—A final revision of your personal statement is due at the beginning of class. As always, all previous versions and peer reviews should be included with your paper submission. It's a good idea to re-read the Writing Assignment Requirements sheet before submitting each assignment.
Rubric:
We'll use 3 categories (total of 100 points possible):
* Critical Thinking and Analysis: 34 points
The draft clearly answers one of the stated questions (the reader
should be able to easily identify which prompt was used). The draft is
written with a target audience (admissions officer, or fellowship
commitee member) in mind, emphasizing qualities of the applicant that
will make him/her a successfull addition to the target school. Beyond
just a statement of facts that answer the given prompt, the draft
includes thoughtful evaluations and assessments of such statements.
The draft addresses any possible weaknesses in an applicant's
background. Finally, the draft displays some originality that
separates it apart from most statements that an admissions officer
will encounter.
* Development and Structure: 33 points
The organization is apparent, coherent, and contributes to the overall
goals; the insightful, specific, focused development of the main
purpose/thesis is effectively organized in paragraphs; transitional
devices (http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/574/1/) help to
develop one idea from the previous one or identify their logical
relations; the reader is effortlessly guided through the
chain of reasoning or progression of ideas. Parallel structure is used
to emphasize common relationships between ideas
(http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/623/1/).
* Language and style: 33 points
The prose is consise, in that does not contain unncessary words or sentences.
Sentences are correct in that there no fragments
(http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/620/1/) or dangling
modifiers (http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/597/1/).
Sentences are clear with naturally flowing subordinate clauses, strong
action verbs, unambiguous pronouns, and limited use of nominalizations
and double-negatives (http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/600/1/). The propose is
written with the appropriate level of formality. The prose is written
in a consistent tense (http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/601/04/) and voice
(active vs passive).